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Peer Review Elleni: DuBois

https://elleniboutsikakisblog.wordpress.com/2017/09/13/american-writing-blog-5/

Colonisation on all levels is bad for the natives. It is the natives of a land who feel a connection to it. The black people of America did not choose to be there. They were not only colonised but relocated. Forced to live in a culture, which was not theirs. They could identify with the native population, because the whites were despised by both. Black people formed a social construction , or culture of their own. They had little resources when it came to food and cooking, but they made the best of what they had access to, and now southern fried chicken and collard greens are sold world wide. The music of the Africans came with the people. The deep resonating voices of African singers, moved to the southern states of America, and the blues were created. Nobody sings the blues like an African American. Listen if you will, to Paul Robeson singing Old Man River, or Mahalia Jackson singing a spiritual song. Tell me you can’t hear the centuries of pain.

Thanks for your blog, it opened some wounds for me about the social injustices that minorities go through. We must acknowledge though the richness of culture what the African American people give to America.
Dave

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Peer Review, Elleni: Huck Finn

https://elleniboutsikakisblog.wordpress.com/category/creative-aw/

Don’t you just wish you could float away from a world full of troubles, a world full of its discriminations and prejudices. We can leave behind a capitalist society and be self-reliant as Emerson would have loved in his vision of a perfect world.
Jim and Huck would make a perfect pair, but I think the word you want here Elleni is two, not too.
Love the layout of your blog, very professional and stylish.

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Peer Review Jessie: Faulkner

https://wordsthought.wordpress.com/2017/10/15/growth/comment-page-1/#comment-61

While Faulkner implored us not to try to better others, therefore not copying their work, Leonardo DaVinci was once quoted as telling young apprentices to copy the masters until you feel our own style emerge. He learnt this in his own apprenticeship
“Under Verrocchio’s tutelage, da Vinci probably progressed from doing various menial tasks around the studio to mixing paints and preparing surfaces. He would have then graduated to the study and copying of his master’s works. Finally, he would have assisted Verrocchio, along with other apprentices, in producing the master’s artworks”. https://www.leonardodavinci.net/

I believe it is wise to look at what was done before, and now with our increased knowledge and techniques, we can improve on what has come before. We ourselves can get better by practice and we do not need co compare ourselves to others, we can compare ourself now to how we were before and see how we have improved.

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Peer Review Christabel: Feminist manifesto

https://christellabade.wordpress.com/category/american-literature/critical-blogs-american-literature/

The equality that Loy desired is not of equality in that everyone should embrace their male and female sides, but making it a level playing field.
Loy is saying that the value of a woman, back then, was her virginity when she got married. She said if this is taken off the table, if women destroyed their virginity, or the value in it, then they can be on a level playing field with man. Man will no longer look to women just to be the bearer of offspring, being pure and untouched by anyone before.
Loy goes on to say that women should not rely on man for sustainable life but to stand on her own two feet. She says that at present, women use their sex and a commodity within marriage ” Do this and I will put out for you tonight, cross me and I wont”. She declares that some women are also parasitic, relying on their husbands for their life and happiness.
A closer analysis of this work is probably needed to provide accurate commentary of it.

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Peer Review Natalie: Faulkner

https://natalie4820.wordpress.com/2017/10/12/try-to-be-better-than-yourself/

I agree that Faulkner was encouraging us to be the best that we can be. We better ourselves not by looking at our contemporaries and trying to better them, but look at the past, and leaders in the past. Look at the knowledge we now possess in comparison to the past, and make yourself better then what has come before. When thinking about self, look back to where you were…when you had little knowledge or little skill. Then look at where you are now and see the improvement, then strive toward tomorrow knowing that you can be better than you are today.

“one should focus on improving themselves and always striving to do better than they have achieved in the past.” I believe you meant to say better than YOU have achieved in the past.

“This statement is highly impressionable as it challenges responders to reject …” I am not sure what you are trying to say there, but the word impressionable would not be the correct word in this sentence.

Hope my criticism helps.
Dave

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Peer Review: Mahdi, Huck Finn

https://mahdihussain94.wordpress.com/2017/09/05/blog-entry-4-huckleberry-finn/

This is a good entry about the ending of the book. I would ask that you look at your spelling in the last two paragraphs of your review. I am sure the word should read philosophy. Also the tense of the word haven’t should be past so should read hadn’t. Blessings. Dave

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Peer Review:Mahdi, The colour line

https://mahdihussain94.wordpress.com/2017/09/13/blog-entry-5-the-color-line/

Hi Mahdi,
I don’t really understand this line “That the colour-line a long as it exists there will white people will continue to be inferior and more dominant than those of colour.” There are also some spelling and grammatical errors in this post.
I agree with the sentiment though. It is sad that throughout history, it is white man who feels he is superior to anyone else. Its Ironical that a tan was sought after by many of the white people ( me included) because the darker skin represented health and vitality. There always has been a divide between not only white and black, but wherever the dominant race or religion sees someone who is different. I am sure it is fear of the unknown. White people, and other majorities need to educate themselves about other people, and not just say that “because there are more of us, we are right, and everyone else is wrong”. After all “we all bleed red”..

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