“How does the uniform look Mum?”

“It looks smashing Ted, remember to keep your head down”.

“Don’t worry Mum, no Jerry is gonna get me”.

He kisses her on the cheek, salutes, smiles, then turns to begin his journey to war, and manhood.

As mother stands on the footpath, holding the gate, so she won’t fall under the grief, she watches her third son go off to do his duty, she smiles, swipes at the tears and waves him goodbye…forever.

Lillie McFerrin Writes

end note : every few weeks I submit to the challenge to write a story in 5 sentences. The word prompt for this week is “Waves”. hope you enjoy. Dave


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10 responses to “Waves

  1. Yeah, nicely written mate.

  2. That says it all! And I see great minds think alike…mine was an out-of-the-box “Waves” too! I think seeing the photo first would have boxed in my weird thinking!

  3. Beautiful take on the prompt

  4. Sushree Dash

    Emotional one…beautifully expressed in few lines 🙂


  5. Great take on the prompt.

  6. A different take on the prompt, and I like the originality of this one. Well done.

  7. ‘so she won’t fall under the grief’ – yes, that’s how it feels. Lovely, poignant piece.

  8. Pingback: Journeys, and world war 1 | Dave Z'Art

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